Come Along

[ThravRande]

[youtube]http://youtu.be/-dBBmi9PfUc[/youtube]

Been experimenting with different tunings lately. Came up with this out of the blue today.

[abw1987]

As requested in the TR thread, I have come to comment.

The picked part is quite pretty. Some neat chords in there as well, and it builds to a nice climax.

Given that you just came up with it today, it sounds almost like a jam as opposed to a traditional song. I'd love to hear this once it's been fleshed out a bit further into something more cohesive. I'd also love to hear some vocals over it.

[ThravRande]

I actually did touch a few things up on it, but I had a string break before I got much done.
It's all good though, because I now have plenty of time to focus on lyrics. Hopefully I can go get some new strings Thursday and get a track recorded for Kortni to sing over. I'm really proud of this one.

[zazthespaz]

I listened to about 3/4 of the song before I had to move on yesterday, but what I heard sounded good! Reminded me of winter for some reason. I agree with Alex though, could use some vocals on top of it. Sounds great without them initially, but after a while feels like it needs something else - maybe try putting the picking part on top of the strumming, or some variation of that (unless that's what you did at the end - like I said, I missed that). Great stuff though!

[ThravRande]

Lyrics are written, I want your opinions, crappy or just sappy?

Come sail away with me (Come sail away with me)
Waste all your time with me (Waste all your time with me)
Come sail away with me (Come sail away with me)
Will you run away with me? (Will you run away with me)

Stop running from yourself
Stop reaching for the door
Take some time
To see what's left
Realize what you're looking for

Come, sail away with me
Come, waste some time with me
Come, sail away with me
Won't you run away with me?

'Cause I have never felt so free
And you will never let me be
Can't you see it's meant be?
Forever just you and me

'Cause I have never felt so free
And you will never let me be
Can't you see it's meant to be?
Forever just you and me
Forever just you and me
Together for forever
And we'll never say 'No never'
So won't you come along with me?

Can't you see?
Aren't we meant to be?
Two lonely souls
Tossed by the sea

And can't you see?
What you mean to me?
And that I give myself
So easily

I have never felt so free
So won't you run away with me?
Can't you see it's meant to be?
Forever just you and me

'Cause I have never felt so free
And you will never let me be
Can't you see we're meant to be?
Forever just you and me
Forever just you and me
Together for forever
And we'll never say 'No never'
So won't you come along with me?
Won't you come along with me?
Won't you come along with me?
Come on, run away with me

[Macca]

It doesn't need vocals. Vocals would ruin it.

[ThravRande]

its okay Macca, you can keep the mp3 without vocals.

[Ryan]

Come sail away with me (Come sail away with me)
Waste all your time with me (Waste all your time with me)
Come sail away with me (Come sail away with me)
Will you run away with me? (Will you run away with me)

not sure what you're hearing there in your head. backing vocals in parenthesis? or just repeating the line again? either way, i don't care for those lines. especially as the opening lines. maybe put them elsewhere in the song? i know you use them in some of the other parts of the song, but i'm just not so sure about those 4 opening lines.

[zazthespaz]

Reading them automatically puts Styx into my head.

[Ryan]

Haha! Yup!

[ThravRande]

messed around with it some more, still not quite satisfied... musically or lyrically. Need to come up with a solo of some sort.